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22 September 2010 @ 07:26 am
Lines, by PFL  
Title: Lines
Author name: PFL
Artist name: Maerrie/hermine
Archive to Pros Lib: Yes
Genre: Slash
Characters/Pairing: Bodie/Doyle
Word count: 17,606
Warnings: None needed

Summary: Doyle wakes up in a warehouse to find himself injured, suffering from amnesia, and apparently involved in a bombing plot with a man named Foster. He soon meets Williams--a tall, dark, beautiful (and engagingly modest) mercenary arms dealer. Doyle tries to find out who he is, what's going on, and why he instinctively trusts Williams, even though he clearly shouldn’t.

Notes: Thank you to elizabethoshea, O Anonymous One, and dorinda for hand-holding, encouragement, beta-work, formatting...everything, really! Thank you to my wonderful, inspiring, incredibly patient artist Maerrie/hermine. (You all are in for a treat!) Thank you to our fabulous (and also incredibly patient) mods callistosh65 and przed. And, finally, a special thank you to my entire F'list (and Circle) for encouragement duty above and beyond. *g*

This has no real relation to the story, but I was repeatedly listening to Snow Patrol's "Chasing Cars" during crucial pondering time with this story. So for me, at least, the story is infused with that song. (In Bodie's perspective. *g*)

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inlovewithboth on September 22nd, 2010 06:20 pm (UTC)
Now that's my kinda story. Gorgeously full of H/C, my favourite part is part one, such an exciting plot, and I wasn't sure where it was going to end up. Part two was different, soulful, heart breaking and heart warming at the same time. And the perfect last line. Wonderful.
msmoatmsmoat on September 23rd, 2010 01:45 am (UTC)
Thank you! It is definitely full of H/C--of a couple different varieties. I certainly had a lot of fun with it (aside from all the drama of just getting it finished, that is *g*). I wanted the amnesia to be more than just a plot device, too--to have it serve as a catalyst not only for the plot but for Bodie and Doyle to learn something about themselves and each other.

I'm so glad you enjoyed this!
firlefanzine: Bodie+Doyle_Mixedfirlefanzine on September 23rd, 2010 09:22 am (UTC)
I love the scenario. One of them suffering from amnesia. But you've added some new aspects.
Is Bodie able to gain the trust of Doyle? And would Doyle do something that is absolutely against his nature?
You solved that very nicely! :-)

And fortunately Ray gets his memories back!(- because losing it for ever, would be some kind of dying...)
And fortunately Ray could convince Bodie that the kiss was a beginning of something wonderful, worth stepping over those lines...! ;-)

Yes - a satisfying read!
Thank you very much!
msmoatmsmoat on September 23rd, 2010 04:07 pm (UTC)
You're welcome! Thank you for commenting. *g*

I'm with you in that permanent change, like not getting his memory back, would be less satisfying for me. But I've also got a thing about making the story realistic, at least in Pros. So...that meant the amnesia had to be of short duration, and part of the confusion from a serious concussion. I'm glad to hear that it worked so well for you!
1moreirene1moreirene on September 23rd, 2010 04:54 pm (UTC)
I am simply amazed you were able to write this given all the madness in your life. Thank you and Maerrie/Hermine.
“What do I need this for?” Doyle took the gun. It was loaded.
“Bed bugs.”
“There’d be nothing left but—nothing, in fact.”
“Why take chances?”

So very them!
msmoatmsmoat on September 23rd, 2010 05:17 pm (UTC)
Hey there! Yes, I'm not quite certain what to do without massive amounts of crushing panic in my life. *g* (Although work is stepping in nicely just at the moment, to fill that void. Ack.)

Thank you! It's kind of wonderful to have the lads nattering on in one's head. *g*
sc_fossil: Pros Partners by Katsc_fossil on September 23rd, 2010 07:15 pm (UTC)
What a wonderful tale. I really like how you showed us everything through "Duncan's" then Doyle's eyes. The first part when Duncan had a lot of interaction with "Williams" I could tell how much Duncan trusted Williams even through the haze of his amnesia. then when they had to set the bombs and Doyle knew something was wrong but couldn't remember and tried to find help. Man, I was sure bad things were on the horizon. You didn't let me down with the second part as Doyle struggles to remember and then "the kiss" looms large in his thoughts. Well done! Thank you, B!
msmoatmsmoat on September 23rd, 2010 11:20 pm (UTC)
Thank you! Years and years go I thought of the opening of this--Doyle waking up with amnesia, confused and lost, and then he meets tall, dark, and beautiful. *g* I always wanted to tell the story through Doyle's eyes, with the audience knowing more than he does. I'm glad I finally had the opportunity to figure out the story and write it.

I'm very glad you enjoyed it!
raven_rsraven_rs on September 23rd, 2010 07:49 pm (UTC)
Great story. I love how, even when the world is so strange and frightening, Doyle still instinctively trusts Bodie, despite any evidence to the contrary. And Bodie, so calm and dependable, despite his obvious concern. While Doyle is the one who is most obviously in need of care and attention, nevertheless Bodie shows his vulnerability as well. Love it.
msmoatmsmoat on September 23rd, 2010 11:22 pm (UTC)
Yeah, one of the sort of hidden themes in this is Bodie's vulnerability--and his realization of that when Doyle has amnesia. I really wanted the amnesia to be more than just a plot device. It serves as a catalyst for both Bodie and Doyle to learn things about themselves and each other.

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed this!
MysteriousAliWays: Professionals - Never Far Awaymysteriousaliwz on September 24th, 2010 11:31 pm (UTC)
I enjoyed this - Ray confusedly trying to fit things together to make sense of everything around him, and how his instinct is to trust Bodie, even though what appear to be the facts of the situation wouldn't warrant such trust.
msmoatmsmoat on September 27th, 2010 10:28 pm (UTC)
I'm late in replying, but thank you for commenting! I think one of the things that appeals to me most about the lads is that level of trust between them. I'm glad you enjoyed the story.
krisserci5: windowkrisserci5 on September 26th, 2010 01:23 am (UTC)
A first time. . . . .yipee. I enjoyed it. Thanks!!!

Great art accompaniment . . . the cover so fit the story.
msmoatmsmoat on September 27th, 2010 10:28 pm (UTC)
Isn't it a gorgeous cover? I was very happy to see it.

And I'm glad you enjoyed the story! There you go--I can do first time stories! *g*
artconservartconserv on September 28th, 2010 12:20 am (UTC)
I thought I'd left a comment already--my apologies. This was absolutely wonderful and was incredibly suspenseful. Kept me on the edge of my seat, biting my nails and stealing time from work to finish it. Great work and a fantastic read. Thank you so much!!

msmoatmsmoat on September 28th, 2010 01:13 pm (UTC)
Yay! I'm glad you enjoyed it so much! (I love that feeling of stealing time from work to read. I mean, yes, it's not good to steal time, but it is wonderful to have the reason to want to do it. *g*) Thank you so much for letting me know.
andreaandreathelion on September 30th, 2010 06:29 am (UTC)
*keeps up with commenting*

That was a brilliant read and I enjoyed it very much :D

*bugger* I wrote so much what I liked about the story but LJ is bitching this morning and I can't be bothered to write it all again :( :sigh:

So now just a big thank you for the fantastic story!
msmoatmsmoat on September 30th, 2010 03:22 pm (UTC)
Darn LJ! Ah, well, I'm glad you enjoyed the story! Thank you for letting me know. *g*
Gilda Elise: Pros-Soul Matesgilda_elise on October 9th, 2010 10:28 pm (UTC)
God, I absolutely loved this! I loved how Ray, even when not knowing who he was felt his connection to Bodie. I loved how Bodie would do anything to protect Doyle, even if it meant his own happiness. But especially I loved how you managed to show both their vulnerabilities and their strengths at the same time.

And I loved this:

Doyle felt it in the way his body relaxed so comfortably against Bodie’s. It was like coming home after a long op and shutting the door on the outside world.
msmoatmsmoat on October 10th, 2010 02:12 am (UTC)
Hey there! Well, this was a very nice comment to read, in the middle of a busy and tiring day. Yay! I'm so pleased you enjoyed this. I love amnesia stories, because of the way relationships might shift, and truths might be revealed because of new perspectives. Bodie and Doyle both learned something about themselves and each other through the amnesia. And the reader gets to enjoy knowing just why it is that Doyle feels drawn to Bodie, and why Bodie is acting as it is. Anyway, thank you for letting me see the story a bit through your eyes--it makes me very happy. *g*

shooting2kill: pic#102368510shooting2kill on October 11th, 2010 03:39 pm (UTC)
I've only just read your story as it takes me ages to read online and I've very slowly been indulging myself and making my way through all these lovely, long stories!

I really loved this, especially in the first half when you showed us Bodie's deep feelings for Ray in so many little ways - for me that was really erotic and attractive. And in turn, the way Ray sensed that somehow he was connected to 'Williams' and safe with him. Beautifully done.

And then Ray's dawning realisation and Bodie's gentle hesitancy were equally well done and left me, the reader, feeling happy and satisfied. Given your tiredness and the many strains, stresses and distractions of your non-writing life, I really don't know how you managed to produce such good work but I hope you got some enjoyment from it as well? Thanks so much for this.
msmoatmsmoat on October 11th, 2010 06:09 pm (UTC)
Hey there! I'm so glad you enjoyed this! And that you picked up on Bodie's emotions, as seen through Doyle's non-comprehending point of view. *g* I really like it when the reader understands more than the point of view character does, and especially when it's something as terrific (to me) as the bond between the lads. *g*

I did enjoy working on this, and thankfully the mods were very generous with me regarding deadlines. It's wonderful to hear that others like the story--thank you for commenting!
solosundance on October 20th, 2010 10:38 am (UTC)
Great story! I love how you used the amnesia to focus in on the very elemental, timeless quality of their connection. Bodie as "Williams" was a wonderful rock to the poor bashed-up Ray, being both himself and his undercover character at once, which must have been a terrible strain. So well done, and so lovely to have the "homecoming" at the end showing the depth of the relationship that Ray kept glimpsing through the fog. Thanks very much, I spent a very happy time in my favourite cafe with this one this morning :D
msmoatmsmoat on October 20th, 2010 12:26 pm (UTC)
Ah, I know that experience of reading a new story that you're enjoying, and all is right with the world! *g* I'm very glad I was able to supply that for you. I wanted the amnesia to be more than just a plot point, you know? So I'm pleased to hear you describe how it helped to illuminate their relationship--for the reader as well as for them. Yay.

Thank you very much for commenting! I'm still way behind in the catching-up, but I should be getting some free time in the next two months. Um. Just when the Christmas stories start rolling in, actually... *g*
moth2fic: pros_bodiewolfmoth2fic on October 21st, 2010 06:21 pm (UTC)
The view of the world thtough Ray's concussion was absolutely fascinating. I was beginning to wonder what would happen once he got his memory back - we were clearly going to have a lot of wordcount left. Then, of course, you explored their confusion over sex as a counterpart to Ray's earlier confusion over identity! Very well done! Thanks for an interesting story and for drawing and then crossing those lines.
msmoatmsmoat on October 22nd, 2010 02:43 pm (UTC)
Hello! I love this, how people are catching up with the BB stories and so we get comments periodically, like little gifts. *g* (I, on the other hand, am still not even close to catching up on reading. Gah.) Thank you! I found I needed to make it a realistic amnesia story, and so that meant the amnesia had to be of brief duration. And then I realized that the story was actually about the aftermath of the effect of the amnesia--what it was the lads learned about themselves and each other because of it.

I'm very glad you enjoyed this!
margaret_r: Managa Prosmargaret_r on October 25th, 2010 05:29 am (UTC)
I enjoyed this story. I thought you conveyed Doyle's confusion and lost memory very well and then the dawning awareness of attraction between the lads followed on quite nicely. And the artwork is gorgeous:)

Thank you for such a nice story.
msmoatmsmoat on January 26th, 2011 01:20 pm (UTC)
Ack! You probably won't see this--it's...um...three months late *headdesk*, but...thank you for commenting on my story! I don't know how I missed this but I did. I'm very glad you enjoyed it, and I agree completely about the gorgeousness of the artwork. I was very lucky in my artist. *g*

Thank you again!
norfolkdumpling: pros c'mere!norfolkdumpling on January 18th, 2011 05:42 pm (UTC)
Ooh oooh ooh! *jumps up and down*

I'm just catching up on last year's stories now that I have them loaded on to my shiny new Kindle, and I've just finished yours. I loved it! I felt so bad for poor Ray when he was all addled and going around in circles at the beginning, but I loved how protective Bodie was, even undercover, and how he tried to get Ray back on track and away from danger while still trying to finish the job.

Perfect Lads, knowing each other even when they don't know themselves ♥
msmoatmsmoat on January 26th, 2011 01:22 pm (UTC)
Hey there! I am only just now catching up on comments to my BB story. Ahem. *blushes* I'm so glad you enjoyed the story! I've been wanting to write an amnesia story for some time. What I'd really like to do is write an unrealistic one, but...Yeah, couldn't do it in Pros. So this is medically accurate, which led to some boundaries for the story...but I did enjoy writing it. *g*

Thank you so much for commenting!