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02 October 2011 @ 07:09 pm
Broken Trust (merentha13)  
Title: Broken Trust
Author: merentha13
Artist: bodiecuddle
Archive to Pros Lib: Yes
Genre: Slash
Characters/Pairing: Bodie/Doyle
Word count: 25,500
Warnings: None

Summary: Doyle has betrayed CI5 and Bodie… or has he? Will Bodie set aside his hurt and anger, to find his missing partner.

Notes: I bothered many people in the writing of this story. I want to thank you all for the advice, information and encouragement. You all know who you are! Special thanks to callisto65 for the early beta and grammar lesson, to firlefanzine for being the best cheerleader ever! And piskiedust for a thorough beta, brit check and lots of support. (Ray wants to send out a thanks to dawnebeth without whose medical advice I’d have had him dead around Chapter 13 (too much “h” in the “h/c” *g*) And a big “THANKS” and “Well Done, Mate” to my vidder bodiecuddle. The Video is terrific!

All mistakes herein are mine. And as usual, I’ve only borrowed the characters. No copyright infringement intended.

I hope you all enjoy reading this as much as I enjoyed taking part in the challenge!

Art Master Post

Fic Master Post on AO3/ Broken Trust

Fic Master Post on lj/Broken Trust Part 1
Fic Master Post on lj/Broken Trust Part 2
Fic Master Post on lj/Broken Trust Part 3

RTF Files for e-readers
Current Mood: draineddrained
liriel1810 on October 3rd, 2011 12:45 am (UTC)
The month has only just started and I'm already behind in reading! ack!

Thank you so much for all your efforts. I do love some Doyle whumpage so I'm really looking forward to reading this! I'll be back to comment again when I have read (but that might take a while - sorry). Cheers!
merentha13merentha13 on October 3rd, 2011 12:02 pm (UTC)
Thanks! This being my first attempt at a long story, I'd appreciate any and all comments about what worked for you and what didn't! I hope you enjoy it.
sc_fossil: Pros Bodie Scruffy by Ankareesc_fossil on October 3rd, 2011 01:24 am (UTC)
Looks good. Congratulations on a succesful posting.
merentha13merentha13 on October 3rd, 2011 12:03 pm (UTC)
Getting all the formatting and links to work was almost harder than writing the story!!! There is a reason some people were not meant to interact with computers! *g* I'm glad its posted, finally.*heavy sigh....)
firlefanzine: Doyle_auf Schutthalde_swfirlefanzine on October 3rd, 2011 03:43 am (UTC)
It was honour and joy to watch the story grow! Thank you for the opportunity.
It's very heatbreaking and dramatic and I can highly recommend it! :-)
And the video shows perfectly the hard times they have to go through.
merentha13merentha13 on October 3rd, 2011 12:04 pm (UTC)
Thank you again, for everything!
(no subject) - bodiecuddle on October 3rd, 2011 02:56 pm (UTC) (Expand)
snail: pros4 - snailbonessnailbones on October 3rd, 2011 11:40 am (UTC)

Congratulations on getting it posted!

It looks great, and I can't wait to read it, thank you.

merentha13merentha13 on October 3rd, 2011 12:04 pm (UTC)
Thanks! I hope you will enjoy it!
bodiecuddle: cheersbodiecuddle on October 3rd, 2011 12:09 pm (UTC)
Big Big Squeezing Hugs to you Mate!!!!!

After month of thoughts and being nervous it is finally done.

The story is FANTASTIC!!!! and it was a pleasure for me to try a bit of artwork (Vid) to it.

Cheers mate xx
merentha13merentha13 on October 4th, 2011 12:28 am (UTC)
Big hugs back at you! The vid is wonderful and I'm still amazed at how fast you put it together! We did good! *g*
~ SCH ~: B&D: AngelSunscherwood on October 3rd, 2011 04:43 pm (UTC)

whaaa~ love the summary. *excited*

*saving to my kindle*
merentha13: Darkmerentha13 on October 4th, 2011 12:29 am (UTC)
It's so cool that my story will be on a Kindle! Almost makes you feel like a real writer! I hope you enjoy it.
inlovewithboth on October 3rd, 2011 04:56 pm (UTC)
What an intriguing plot *shakes Bodie hard by the shoulders*, "No Bodie, use your brain, there's no way Doyle would do this! Trust him!" and then... "will you hurry up,look what they're doing to him!" Thank you Merentha for a great story and a huge dose of H/C. And I loved Bodiecuddle's vid too, it summed it up beautifully. xx
bodiecuddlebodiecuddle on October 3rd, 2011 06:40 pm (UTC)
yeah... Merentha did a very great job, Her first long story .. and the first Big Bang one..

Hats off!!!! Bodie and Doyle are so real here.. Ahh I love it!!
(no subject) - shooting2kill on October 3rd, 2011 08:22 pm (UTC) (Expand)
(no subject) - merentha13 on October 4th, 2011 12:32 am (UTC) (Expand)
shooting2killshooting2kill on October 3rd, 2011 08:27 pm (UTC)
It's great seeing your story 'up in lights' (so to speak!) and I'm looking forward to having a nice, leisurely read of it. Well done and thank you for sharing your work.

Edited at 2011-10-03 08:29 pm (UTC)
merentha13merentha13 on October 4th, 2011 12:32 am (UTC)
Thank you! I appreciated your looking it over all those weeks ago. I hope you enjoy the finished version.
something inside: going homepiskiedust on October 3rd, 2011 09:06 pm (UTC)
all done!
Hi there

Great to see the story up! It has been fun to read/ check for you.
I hope it wasn't too much of a wrench to let the story go and get it posted!

Brilliant job
merentha13: Darkmerentha13 on October 4th, 2011 12:34 am (UTC)
Re: all done!
Thank you, for the kind words and all your input along the way! I was "playing" with it right up to the last minute... but I'm glad it is finally "all done"!
vic: Professionals - doyle grinsaintvic on October 3rd, 2011 09:09 pm (UTC)
Yay so glad to see this up, I am downloading it as soon as I have finished tyoing this comment and am really looking forward to reading this.
merentha13merentha13 on October 4th, 2011 12:35 am (UTC)
I'm glad it finally posted too! Enjoy it!
murphybabemurphybabe on October 3rd, 2011 09:13 pm (UTC)
Well, again, I should have been working but...

Massive congratulations to you both for fic and vid. Poor Bodie. Idiot Bodie. Fancy believing his Doyle would betray him! Poor Doyle for getting whumped so badly.

This kept me gripped all the way through. Thank you for a great effort.
merentha13: beat upmerentha13 on October 4th, 2011 12:37 am (UTC)
Thanks! I'm glad it kept you interested - I've not written anything near this long before and I was afraid it might drag.
(no subject) - bodiecuddle on October 5th, 2011 11:44 am (UTC) (Expand)
krisserci5krisserci5 on October 4th, 2011 02:47 am (UTC)
My favorite moment was when the light bulb finally turned on and Bodie realized himself that his Ray was no bad. (You made me wait for it, though).

Great vid was great.

Thanks to you both.

merentha13: Darkmerentha13 on October 4th, 2011 03:35 am (UTC)
So glad you enjoyed the story and the vid. I wrote and re-wrote that scene about a dozen times, glad to know it worked. Thanks for your comments.
golden_bastetgolden_bastet on October 4th, 2011 03:15 am (UTC)
Arrrgggghhh! I wrote a comment about your story - and then Firefox crashed. (Well, if you saw how many windows I have open, you'd crash, too. :()

But the main gist was to say congrats! on your first long story (really???) - it was a great ride figuring out just how everything would be resolved.

And kudos to bodiecuddle for the vid - I think this is the first vid I've seen really tailored to a story, and I understand now that's it's much more than just "possible" to do that. :)
merentha13: Darkmerentha13 on October 4th, 2011 03:38 am (UTC)
Computers can be very frustrating... you wouldn't believe all the things that kept going wrong when I tried to post. AO3 kept messing up the formatting, it deleted whole paragraphs, then I had trouble with the links - who'd have thought that one little quotation mark could make such a big difference! *g* But it posted and I can relax. Thanks for your kind words. I'm glad you enjoyed both the story and the vid (she did do a great job of choosing scenes to go with the story!)
(no subject) - bodiecuddle on October 5th, 2011 11:47 am (UTC) (Expand)
jaicen5jaicen5 on October 4th, 2011 11:51 am (UTC)
Hello Merentha

you should really do long stories more often, I read this in one go and enjoyed it. the plot was sound, the action was brilliant, the pacing was perfect, the HC was spot on and a hurt Doyle made my day.

Well done, I love to read a long story, I wish there were more of them.

Oh and BC did a nice job on the matching vid, she captured Doyle's aloneless very well.

merentha13merentha13 on October 4th, 2011 12:24 pm (UTC)
Wow! You've made my day! Thank you so much! I've been a big fan of your Pro's stories for a long time. I too favor the long story (even though most of my stuff is pretty short!), but I've gained a new appreciation for just how hard a long story is to write, to keep everything together. I may try another...someday! *g*
(no subject) - jaicen5 on October 6th, 2011 12:22 pm (UTC) (Expand)
(no subject) - bodiecuddle on October 5th, 2011 11:48 am (UTC) (Expand)
norfolkdumpling: pros bodie sleepynorfolkdumpling on October 4th, 2011 05:13 pm (UTC)
Downloading to the Kindle as I type :) Looking forward to reading this - I love the premise and I'm a total sucker for h/c, so bring it on! *g*

The vid is great, and a real teaser for the story - well done to bodiecuddle!
merentha13: Darkmerentha13 on October 5th, 2011 01:01 am (UTC)
I hope you like it! I'm still blown away by the thought of something I've written being on someone's Kindle! Technology is a wonderful thing, no? *g*

BC did do a terrific job - picked out the perfect scenes to go along with the story.
(no subject) - bodiecuddle on October 5th, 2011 11:50 am (UTC) (Expand)